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Unbound structure;
unhinged bones
locked together
with unsymmetrical
unfit screws.

None of these are meant to be here.
They are
cheap and shaven
and the
grooves are rusted.

There is no tool that can pull them out without breaking,
without collapsing
the planned out
unintended construction.

We had the instructions sure
and all the parts
but
in our fumble,
in the exchange of hands
of ALL the people who
intended to help us;

in all the accidents

(and

no one at fault
or
taking fault
for all our faults)

some fell beneath the table
underneath the drawer
into dark unreachable corners
so we worked with what we had
and made our own instructions but it was never
the perfect picture.

It wasn't everything it was suppose to be.
Unfit construction
in function.
She seeks for the imperfect
perfection or maybe
she just wants to work
without breaking.
She's facing forward and bearing her heart.
I am looking at her back.
nerves and the tower of her spine
nervous
nervous system
misfiring
she's electric.
Electrocuted I lay in daze
and she tilts her head to the right
wondering why
I seek to taste her lightening
my heart is lost thunder
left behind
and
she forgets light is faster then sound
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Given 2012-12-07
Cheap fix, 360 by ~BlueSoulGreenMind ( Suggested by UnspecifiedUnknown and Featured by Beccalicious )
:iconlyricana:
"some fell beneath the table
underneath the drawer
into dark unreachable corners
so we worked with what we had
and made our own instructions but it was never
the perfect picture."

I think this is one of the best stanzas!  It's perfect for not just describing love but I also think it could describe the way people go about building up their lives.
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:iconbluesoulgreenmind:
That is true now that I think about it. Thank you for the insight. 
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:iconvaunted-aura:
vaunted-aura Dec 23, 2013  Student Writer
i'm stunned. 
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:iconarchangel-33:
splendid work.... thanks for writing that...
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:iconbluesoulgreenmind:
Thanks for the comment and the praise.
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:iconkaitforest:
congratulations on the dd, i was waiting for it!
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:iconbluesoulgreenmind:
Thank you I really appreciate it. I never imagined that I would get a DD but thanks for thinking so and watching it become a reality. :)
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:iconjakesexception:
Sort of reminds me of my style...
Maybe that's why we both got DDs? XD

Either way, well done.
An engaging piece definitely deserving of the award.
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